Arco (TN)

Arco (TN)

Monday, August 18, 2014

Carpe Diem's Kamishibai - Departing Summer - August 18, 2014

What is kamishbai? Here let's look at what Chèvrefeuille has to say about it:

"As I have tried to catch up commenting I ran into several nice haibun written and inspired on the prompts of our Haiku Kai. So I think it's time for a new episode of our haibun-feature "Kamishibai" (which means story-teller in Japanese). The goal is to write a haibun inspired on the given prompt. For this episode that is "Departing Summer". Here in The Netherlands it's still summer, but temperatures are downing and it feels like autumn already. Trees are loosing their leaves already ... so I thought 'this is a great prompt for Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, and for our Kamishibai-feature'.
For this episode I love to challenge you a bit by giving a few rules which you have to use:
  1. A maximum of 100 words (don't ask me why);
2. the haiku has to follow a few of the the classical rules:
       a. 5-7-5 syllables;
       b. season word;
       c. cutting word (interpunction);
       d. interchangeable first and third line
3. (Not an obligation) I love to read it in English and in your own language (e.g. for me that would be Dutch)

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Summer Sentinels


"Evergreens are summer’s sentinels, reminding us that winter is a passing phase!" said Mysty-Lynn as she looked at the barren autumn trees.

"Wherever do you get these silly ideas?" replied her brother Michael-James.

The two children were twins, but as different in character as winter and summer.

“I read about it in a dream.” She shyly answered him.

“You don’t read dreams dummy!” he retorted.

“Oh but you do Michael-James …” this was grandma who’d been sitting quietly knitting in her rocking chair. “It’s through dreams that we touch upon some of the more beautiful aspects of life.” She recited:

summer sentinels
evergreen's faithful vigil
  spring's resurrection

12 comments:

  1. Sometimes it does feel like we read our dreams -- I really like how you have given us so much information about the characters' personalities in such a brief space.

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  2. Thanks ... it was fun writing prose ... I've been neglecting that aspect recently. :-/

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  3. sweet, poignant and profound

    cheers
    JzB

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    1. Thank you very much and cheers to you too JzB!

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  4. Lovely story, Georgia, you always write great stories. I get some of my inspirations from bits and pieces of dreams.

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    1. As do I ... I'm delighted that you enjoyed this Cher.

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  5. Very nice written haibun Georgia ... the deeper layer is just gorgeous ... history will always be part of our lives. In our lives our ancestors are still present.

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    1. I'm happy you went beyond the surface ... thanks for commenting this aspect.

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  6. Very good with the two young 'uns as seasons. Had real meaning running through it. Very nice.

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    1. Thanks Hamish .. I'm happy you caught that. Thanks for the visit!

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  7. The sweetness of a dialogue is great in this haibun

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    1. Thanks ... from the mouths of babes :-)

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harmonious words ... like crystal clear water ... pure ectasy

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