purple mums blooming
brightening the gloomy fence
- frantic bees humming
brightening the gloomy fence
- frantic bees humming
© G.s.k. '14
1. Describe a moment as short as the sound of a pebble thrown into water; so present tense;2. 5-7-5 syllables;3. Use a kigo (or seasonword);4. Use a kireji (or cuttingword);5. Sometimes a deeper spiritual or Zen-Buddhistic meaning;6. First and third line are interchangeable and last but not least7. No Self, avoid personal or possessive pronouns (I, me, my); it's an experience not how the poet feels about it.
Beautiful! :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a beauty Georgia ... very nice and so in tune with the classics
ReplyDeleteThanks Kristjaan, I was lucky that morning to have passed by this house where the whole of the fence area was planted with mums.
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