Arco (TN)

Arco (TN)

Friday, July 18, 2014

Writing With Shiki (3) - "reeds tremble" - July 18, 2014

Today's post is dedicated for the third time to Shiki.  Chèvrefeuille put this little known haiku up for our inspiration:

meigetsu no deru ya yurameku hanasusuki

at the full moon's
rising, the silver-plumed
reeds tremble

© Masaoka Shiki

Thinking of the full moon, and here in the Carpe Diem post, we find that the moon is an autumn kigo, I'm going to attempt to write a haiku in Shiki's style:

shimmering moon light
along the lake front
the willows weep

© G.s.k. '14

silver moon rise
over the eastern mountains
enlightened valley

©G.s.k. '14

I loved how Chèvrefeuille took us on a tour of the moon throughout the seasons.  It was a perfectly delightful post and I would recommend you click the link on his name in the beginning of my post and visit the Carpe Diem site directly ... it's a wonderful read.


  1. Replies
    1. Willows are so beautiful ... Thanks Belinda-

  2. Loving both of them - imagery is wonderful - but the ending of the second is great!!!

    1. I liked it too ... well, I liked both actially ... but I liked how I could play on enlightened.

  3. Or at least one could hope so!


harmonious words ... like crystal clear water ... pure ectasy

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