Winter Wonderland
Christmas is near
in the sleepy Alpine vale
shops glitter with lights
under low heavy grey skies
there’s a promise of snow
in that valley
among bare trees in the park
children play
their smiling elders watch on
as the first snow flakes fall
soon white
the slide and the swings
abandoned
kids run home for their sleds
some build funny snow men
Santa on the corner
rings his bell by a cauldron
asking for alms
to buy blankets and soup
for the poor and homeless
cold winter beauty
trees frosted in hoary white
the pond is like glass
an old man sells chestnuts
wrapped in brown paper bags
carolers sing
under the glow of lamp light
in crystal voices
of good kings and shepherds
and white winter wonderlands
Christmas is near
kids build funny snow men
Santa asks for alms
an old man sells chestnuts
carolers sing winter songs *
© G.s.k. ‘14
* and ending variation .. what do you think?
Christmas is near
trees frosted in hoary white
shops glitter with lights
carolers sing winter songs
of winter wonderlands
trees frosted in hoary white
shops glitter with lights
carolers sing winter songs
of winter wonderlands
This week’s challenge is to write a chained poem (Renga) of maximum eight (8) stanza inspired on the image and the prompt WINTER WONDERLAND within 24 hours. Linked to Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.
There is a different bustle of activity when most have time to enjoy the weather -
ReplyDeleteA friend from Australia told me of their first cold holidays and thinking how perfect it would be - that winter scene. But then missed the BBQ and the children running out of doors bare foot in the warm air.
it's been said: to every thing, there is a season ... the wise woman enjoys the fruits in their season ;-)
DeleteAnother masterpiece from the queen of renga -- ;)
ReplyDeleteSeriously though -- I really do enjoy this -- and would vote for ending #2.
Like spending a day in a quaint village ---
Very nice!
Thanks Jen ... for the compliment and the feed back ... I was thinking that that second ending was probably the one I should choose ..
DeleteA delightful poem...thank you for sharing... I hope I checked the correct box above...eccezionale ..I like both endings... the second just a dite more...thank you for sharing
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Thanks Siggi! I preferred the second ending ... but liked the first one ... maybe I should just write a tanka! Thanks for clicking the box .. eccezionale means fantastic and if that's what you meant ... thanks a million!
DeletePeace and love to you too!
Wonderful.. I got the image of a camera moving through scene at the start of some film.. setting the scene with the chestnuts and the.. in that sense I liked the first ending more... it wrapped the scenery together better for me.. the second one was perhaps more lyrical....
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn - loved your comment on the poem, and quite suitable as I usually walk around with a camera. I can see what you mean about the different tone of the two endings. Thanks for giving me your opinion!
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