Arco (TN)

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Thursday, January 15, 2015

Writing with Sogi - a Troiku - January 15, 2015



hoarfrost



sparkling fields
morning frost becomes spirit
warm morning sun


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sparkling fields
under the persimmon tree
a white blanket

morning frost becomes spirit
grass and trees sway
a warm morning breeze

warm morning sun
life shakes off cold darkness
winter birds sing

© G.s.k. ‘15


This was written for Carpe Diem Haiku Kai's Special #127 dedicated to Iio Sog with a request to write a Troikui:

Both grasses and trees 
waiting for the moon
dewy evening 

© Iio Sogi

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Our host's Troiku:

morning dew
vanished in a second as the sun rises -
life is short

© Chèvrefeuille


morning dew
makes the spiderweb crystalline
nature's treasure

vanished in a second as the sun rises
the fragile hoarfrost on the branches -
ice skating

life is short
I see the thin grey hair of my parents
I become grey too

© Chèvrefeuille






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12 comments:

  1. UnknownJanuary 15, 2015 at 9:34 AM

    I love this form and write when I can. love that you put those fruit trees in your poem, and that last stanza almost makes winter tolerable and peaceful:) brava, cara

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    1. Bastet's Waka LibraryJanuary 24, 2015 at 8:02 AM

      My mind is ever looking towards warmer weather these days. I agree, the troiku is an interesting form. Thanks for your lovely comment!

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  2. JazzbumpaJanuary 15, 2015 at 6:25 PM

    "morning frost becomes spirit"
    an enigmatic line
    i like it

    these are sweet and gentle
    a hope for spring in midwinter

    cheers
    jzb

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    1. Bastet's Waka LibraryJanuary 24, 2015 at 8:04 AM

      Thanks ... I was imaging the frost becoming mist with warmer weather ;-)

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  3. Adas AlcoveJanuary 15, 2015 at 9:02 PM

    I really like this. Lovely imagery!

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  4. Blog It Or Lose ItJanuary 16, 2015 at 3:41 AM

    Well done, Georgia! The sparkling fields under the persimmon tree -- an especially beautiful image :)

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    1. Bastet's Waka LibraryJanuary 24, 2015 at 8:05 AM

      Thanks Paloma .. I should have put up a photo I have of a persimmon tree in a frosted field .. but I'm happy the haiku transmits the image without the photo!

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  5. brudbergJanuary 17, 2015 at 1:11 PM

    This is such beauty in that frosty morn... Awakening and those frosty

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    1. Bastet's Waka LibraryJanuary 24, 2015 at 8:07 AM

      Thanks Bjorn ... it's true that the white painted trees and grass are very beautiful ... thanks for dropping in!

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  6. Fascinating QuestJanuary 23, 2015 at 11:36 AM

    Beautiful imagery...

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harmonious words ... like crystal clear water ... pure ectasy

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