Arco (TN)

Arco (TN)

Saturday, November 8, 2014

Tan Renga - Early Morning from Bastet and Sekhmet's Library - November 8, 2014

For this week's "Tan Renga" at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, Chèverfeuille has honored my by choosing my haiku that I wrote for Shuukan and published on Bastet and Sekhmet's Library on November 2, 2014:

The Shuukan prompt (HERE) was the OM - Om purifies bliss and pride (realm of the gods)  - from the mantra  Om Mani Padme Hum.


Rain drops


early morning
silence before the rising sun
raindrops on a branch


(c) G.s.k. ’14

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Here is the lovely conclusion created by our host which I enjoyed very much:


early morning
silence before the rising sun
raindrops on a branch          
(Georgia)

on the deserted beach
I greet the sun with joy             
(Chèvrefeuille)


Here is my attempt to write a conclusion to the "hokku":

early morning
silence before the rising sun
raindrops on a branch

in somber autumn darkness
tears fall softly in the woods

a yellow breasted finch
twitters in the dawning light
dispelling storm clouds

(c) G.s.k. '14






20 comments:

  1. A lovely renga, Georgia -- the storm clouds never have a chance on your blog! You always send them packing - with style. :)

    Hugs!

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    1. Thanks Jen ... a lovely comment .. much appreciated.

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  2. This was simple beautiful. Loved the tears falling in the woods, and how you lifted the mood with your second haiku Stunning black and white photo.

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    1. Thanks Dolores ... one of my favorite photos.

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  3. luv the play with light in your verses

    much love...

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    1. Thanks Gillena ... much love to you too!

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  4. Lovely completion of your own Tanka --

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  5. A real connection to nature there - beautifully done. I am still struggling!

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    1. I read your lovely conclusion .. I'm afraid I have difficulty with the blog you used ... it tells me to sign up for comments etc .. I do .. open my mail ... get back to Medium and it tells me to sign up to comment all over again ...

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  6. That finch.. I would need his voice here.. to dispel the dread of clouds.

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    1. We just had 3 days of rain .. he sang all the same even under the pouring rain ... but the clouds ignored him.

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  7. WOW! Georgia this is a wonderful continuation ... very nice with a lot of scenes hidden in it.

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    1. Thanks Kristjaan ... glad you enjoyed it.

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  9. Ah!! Georgia this is so beautiful...how is it possible to make your completion even more spectacular...love that gold finch!

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    1. Thanks for the great compliment .. I felt that as it was my hokku, I should honor Kristjaan with something extra ... I love these finches .. they are so chattery!

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harmonious words ... like crystal clear water ... pure ectasy

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