One of the important aspects to Shiki was to remove the religious aspects from haiku writing in favor of every nature and the everyday aspects of life. Here is the poem today that we'll use as inspiration:
inazuma ya mori no sukima ni mizu mo mitari
a flash of lightning;
between the trees of the forest,
water appears
© Masaoka Shiki
And here is my haiku:
sudden piercing flash
illuminating grey skies
mountains tremble
illuminating grey skies
mountains tremble
© G.s.k. '14
Your words sent a tremor through me like I experience in an intense thunder storm.
ReplyDeleteA splendid compliment, thank you very much and thaks for dropping in.
DeleteA glimpse of trembling mountain! :)
ReplyDeleteHi there! I commented on this but somehow I think the comment disappeared!
ReplyDeleteLoving the trembling mountains illuminated in the lightning's flash - like all earth trembles as much as the people!
No no, your comment came over loud and clear ... I may remove the moderator ... it's such a hassle for everyone (encluding me!) thanks for your wonderful comment ... here when the lightning flashes the thunder rolls through those mountains and they do seem to vibrate and tremble at times :-)
DeleteEvocative of the storm. Enjoyed this one !
ReplyDeleteThank you! A pleasure to see that!
DeleteI'm sure there is lightning so powerful that even mountains tremble!
ReplyDeleteLightning Haiga
Here it often seems so when a real bad storm makes it echo from mountain to mountain across our valley.
DeleteWow Georgia what a beauty
ReplyDeleteThank you Kristjaan! I'm happy you enjoyed it!
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