This week for the Tan Renga Challenge I'm honored that Chèvrefeuille chose one of the haiku I wrote for Carpe Diem's Ghost Writer: A Dream Within A Dream where we were to distill a great poem by Edgar Allen Poe written by Jen from Blog it or Lose it. I originally published the haiku on my WordPress Blog with the collage that you see at the top of the page.
a dream in a dream
sand slipping through old fingers
autumn leaves turn red
sand slipping through old fingers
autumn leaves turn red
© Georgia
wondering where the time's gone
she walks alone in the park
she walks alone in the park
sunshine streaks the trees
first snow flakes begin to fall -
early afternoon
first snow flakes begin to fall -
early afternoon
© Georgia
I love this continuation, Georgia, but that second line in your haiku is stunning...it could be the name of a tv series or book of short stories...each story a new memory. Wow! I really like that thought! (hint hint)
ReplyDeleteThanks Oliana ... I think it's probably easier to renga oneself ... I'm so happy you enjoyed the continuation ... what an interesting idea ...
DeleteThis is beautiful..:)
ReplyDeleteThanks .. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
DeleteThis is beautiful, Georgia --- just beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jen ... :-)
DeleteI really like how the complete set seems to condense time, almost, with the sunshine and snow occurring together. Because time doesn't really occur in a straight line, memories always keep the past alive in the present. And you capture that poignancy well, I think.
ReplyDeleteThanks Blake ... love your considerations here ... and I agree, time or perhaps memory doesn't occur in a straight line ... yours is a lovely comment.
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