fast receding tides
hermit crab exposed - scuttles
hermit crab exposed - scuttles
gull laughs overhead
© G.s.k. '14
Linked to Carpe Diem Sparkling Stars #14, where haiku from Sara McNulty and Chèvrefeuille were our inspiration. Sara is the winner of the first Sea Shell game! Here is her haiku:
Ocean tide ebbs
Sand glistens with sea treasures
Lucent blue beach glass
© Sara McNulty
And our host's:
walking along the beach
following the tracks of a hermit crab -
Ah! That salty air
© Chèvrefeuille
For Sparkling Stars we write a "classical haiku":
- 5/7/5 syllables;
- Interchangeable 1st/ 3rd lines;
- Kigo (season word) [here, the plover];
- Kireji (cutting word or punctuation); and
- Deeper meaning
Beautifully composed haiku Georgia ... fragile and in balance ... chapeau!
ReplyDeleteMerci! :-)
DeleteUh oh..... hermit crab better watch out!
ReplyDeleteNice one, Georgia ---
Ah yes .. I think you're right!
DeleteI like the drama you manage to gather into every line here - not what I expect from a haiku, so it's a nice surprise :)
ReplyDeleteAnd Sparkling Stars is meant to be classical? Oh..
Ah yes, usually Sparkling Stars are a classical haiku. Glad you enjoyed the little story - but there's drama in life as well as harmony, no? :-)
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