Arco (TN)

Arco (TN)

Saturday, January 24, 2015

Little Creatures - Daisies - January 24, 2015

daisy chain 11pp

in early summer
children play in the fields
making daisy chains

 unamused  bees look on
at the waste of good food

as mothers call
daisy chains abandoned
among the poppies

trampled grass and flowers
sun sets behind the mountain

a young girl wonders
she plucks white daisy petals
looking for true love

decapitating daisies
one hot summer afternoon 

© G.s.k. ‘15

This is the Little Creatures variation, which I missed on my Morning Haiku and Waka post - eight (\8) stanza renga with a twist. What does that mean "with a twist" you have to follow the following "line-structure" 3 lines 2 lines 3 lines 2 lines 2 lines 3 lines 2 lines 3 lines,


  1. Yes, I'd wondered about that ... good news for a little girl, but horrible news for a daisy!
    Had to laugh at the bees grumbling over lost food --- :)

    A great take, Georgia --

    1. Thanks .. and in my opinion ... I think I have to edit a bit ... glad you liked the take though.

  2. I remember doing this as a child and then with my children. I love this: "unamused the bees look on
    at the waste of good food" never thought of that perspective before : )

    1. It just occurred to me also as I wrote the haiku ... thanks for stopping by!


harmonious words ... like crystal clear water ... pure ectasy

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